Avoiding Syntax Errors in Scientific Writing (Word Choice)


Avoiding Syntax Errors in Scientific Writing (Word Choice)

 

This slide presents six tips for using words economically to produce readable article. In general, the slide was developed using Yang’s An outline of scientific writing: for researchers with English as a foreign language, pp. 3-9. Feel free to access and download the slide from here.

After studying the slide and the text (Yang’s An outline of scientific writing: for researchers with English as a foreign language, pp. 3-9), revise each of the following eight sentences to make them more effective. Feel free to use one or more tips described in the slide and text. Write down only the revised version on the reply section below.

  1. This study was conducted in order to get empirical true informational data that has relationship with the effect of reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.
  2. Even though she had been guided a numerous number of times to carry out some classroom action researches, she still did not have enough confidence to conduct a classroom action research individually.
  3. Very completely different from the conventional vision of teachers which views teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.
  4. Since she believed that English teaching would be a very interesting profession which is accepted in all countries in the world, she continuously kept doing her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program.
  5. Beginning from the early beginning of the last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research their own practices and use the findings of these researches of theirs to create improvements in their own practices.
  6. The distribution of the data obtained from the survey concerning the respondents’ perception in the blog’s effectiveness to develop writing skills revealed that the majority of them i.e. 79%, believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.
  7. Based on the findings, it was concluded that, as a matter of fact, people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.
  8. In spite of the fact that researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased dramatically in more and more places in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention that has given specifically to this issue, and only few studies have been carried out in this archipelago country to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

Deadline for posting answer: Saturday, April 5, 2014, 12:00 pm. Good luck!

27 Comments

  1. Hi sir, this is my assignment sir.

    Name : Vhanny Rumondang
    Nim: 1112150029

    1. This study was conducted to get an empirical that effect of reading comics to students’ achievements in vocabulary learning.
    2. Even though she had been repeatedly conducted a study in class, but did not have enough action in the classroom.
    3. Teachers as recipients only and the knowledge society have been rejected by a growing recognition.
    4. Beginning of last century, a philosopher proposes that professional education should understand education expert, then use research to make their own repairs practice.
    5. A century ago, a philosopher of education experts and education professionals should propose the study. In order to increase research into practice.
    6. 79% of the data that a blog is very effectively used to develop writing skills.
    7. Based on survey said people who failed in a career they often give up and do not rise to achieve their goals.
    8. Researchers observed that the use of a foreign language in Indonesia general little attention and some researchers have observed the role of English in Indonesia.

  2. my name is desiana sianturi
    NIM 1112150022
    here are my answers.
    thank you.

    1. This was study conducted to get emprical that has relation effect of reading comics to students’ achievments in vocabulary learning.
    2. Although, she had been guided many times to carry out some classroom action research, she still didn’t confidence to conduct it individually.
    3. Very different from conventional teachers which has been challlenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.
    4. Since she bilieved in English teaching is interesting proffesion which is accpepted in the word, she kept doing her best to finish her collage.
    5. Beginning of last century, philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research that educational pundits and use these researches to create improvement their own practices.
    6. 79 % respondents’ perception about the blog’s effectiveness to develop writing skill belive it.
    7. It was concluded, people who failed in careers frequently is easy to give up and sticking in their goals.
    8. In spite of the fact that researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased dramatically in more places in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention that has given specifically to this issue, and only few studies have been carried out in this archipelago country to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

  3. Name : Putri Warinagia Peranginangin
    SRN : 11 121 500 36

    1. This study was conducted to get empirical informational that has relationship with the effect of reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.

    2. Even though she had been guided a number of times to carry out some classroom action researches, she still did not have enough confidence to do it individually.

    3. Different from the conventional vision of teachers has been challenged by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice over the last decade.

    4. Since she believed that English teaching would be a very interesting profession, she continuously kept doing her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program.

    5. Beginning from the last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research and use the findings of theirs to create improvements in their own practices.

    6. The distribution of the data which was obtained from the survey concerning the respondents’ perception in the blog’s effectiveness to develop writing skills revealed that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7. Based on the findings, it was concluded that, actually, people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

    8. Although the fact that researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased dramatically in the world, Indonesian public schools has been very little attention to this issue, and only few studies have been carried out to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

  4. 1. This study was conducted in order to get empirical data that has relationship with the effect of reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.
    2. Even though she had been guided many times to carry out some classroom action researches, she still did not have enough confidence to conduct it.
    3. completely different from the conventional teachers which has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.
    4. Since she believed that English teaching would be a very interesting profession She kept doing her best to finish her study.
    5. the beginning of the last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research their own practices and use them to create improvements in their own.
    6. data obtained from the survey respondents’ perceptions regarding the effectiveness of the blog to develop writing skills revealed that the majority believe blogs are very effective for developing writing skills.
    7. Based on the findings people who fail in their careers frequently give up too easily in sticking to their goals.
    8. researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased dramatically in more places, in Indonesian public schools there has been very little attention that has given to this issue to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

  5. Nama : Mirna Widia Yunita
    NIM : 1112150043
    CLASS B

    1. This study was conducted to get data about the effect of reading comics to achieve students’ vocabulary
    2. She had been guided to do of classroom action research, she did not confident to do it.
    3. Different from the conventional vision of teachers which views teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.
    4. The conventional vision of teachers which views teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.
    5. She kept doing her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program because she believed it would be interesting and be accepted around the world.
    6. The data obtained that 79% of respondent believe that blog is very effective to develop writing skills.
    7. It was concluded that people who fail in their careers give up easily in sticking to their goals.
    8. The researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms Indonesia public school have been little attention and few studies have been carried out to investigate the role of English classes in Indonesia.

  6. Good night sir, this is my assignment sir
    sorry sir, I means:

    Name: Erika Magdalena Septiana
    Nim: 1112150901

    1.This study was conducted to get an empirical data about the effect of reading comics to students’ achievement in vocabulary learning.

    2. although she had studied doing some classroom action researches, she did still not confident to conduct it.

    3. Recently, the teachers’ vision about the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of people’s knowledge has been challenged by growing acknowledgement are different for the empowerment through researching their own practice.

    4. Because she believes that teaching English is an interesting profession in the world, she spirit to complete the English teaching undergraduate program.

    5. Beginning from the first of the last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research, use and improve the finding of these researches in their own practices.

    6. The data revealed that 79% of the respondents believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7. Based on the findings, the fact is people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

    8. The researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased in many places in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention that has given specifically to this issue, and only few studies have been carried out in this archipelago country to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

    Thank you sir 🙂

  7. Good night sir, this is my assignment sir

    name: Erika Magdalena Septiana
    nim: 1112150901

    1.This study was conducted to get an empirical data about the effect of reading comics to students’ achievement in vocabulary learning.

    2. although she had studied doing some classroom action reaearches, she did still not confident to conduct it.

    3. Recently, the teachers’ vision about the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of people’s knowledge has been challenged by growing acknowledgement are different for the empowerment through researching their own practice.

    4. Because she believes that teaching English is an interesting profession in the world, she spirit to complete the English teaching undergraduate program.

    5. Beginning from the first of the last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research, use and improve the finding of these researches in their own practices.

    6. The data releaved that 79% of the respondents believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7. Based on the findings, the fact is people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

    8. The researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased in many places in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention that has given specifically to this issue, and only few studies have been carried out in this archipelago country to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

    Thank you sir

  8. Jessica Talentia
    11 121 500 39

    Answer :

    1. This study was conducted to get empirical informational data that has relationship with the effect of reading comics to achieve students’ vocabulary.

    2. She still did not have enough confidence to conduct a classroom action research individually even though she had been guided a numerous number.

    3. The conventional vision of teachers which views teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged in last decade to grow acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through their researching.

    4. She believed that English teaching would be a very interesting profession which is accepted in all countries in the world and she continuously finish the English teaching undergraduate program.

    5. The last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research their own practices and use the findings of these researches to create improvements in their own practices.

    6. The data obtained from the survey concerning the respondents’ perception in the blog’s effectiveness to develop writing skills revealed that the majority of them i.e. 79%, believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7. Based on the findings that people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

    8. The use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased dramatically in more and more places in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention that has given specifically to this issue, and only few studies have been carried out in this archipelago country to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

  9. nama : elroy samosir
    nim : 1112150038

    1. This study was conducted to obtain data that has relationship of reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.
    2. She still did not have enough confidence to conduct a classroom action research. Although she had been guided to do it.
    3. Absolutely different from the vision of teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of people’s knowledge has been challenged by the growing acknowledgement for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.
    4. She did her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program because she knows that English is accepted in the world and interesting proffesion.
    5. Beginning from the early beginning of the last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research their own practice and fix it.
    6. Based on survey concerning the respondents’ perception in the blog’s affectiveness for writing skills revealed that majority of them i.e. 79%, believe that blog is very affective to use to develop writing skills.
    7. Based on the findings, it was concluded that people who fail to have success in their careers too easily desperate.
    8. The use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention to this issue, and only few studies have been carried out in this archipelago country to investigate the role of Indonesian in English classes.

  10. Name : Rahelia Eta .S
    NIM : 1112150033
    Class : B

    1. This study was conducted to get data about the effect of reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.

    2. She still did not have enough confidence to conduct a classroom action research. Even though she had been guided to carry out about it.

    3. The conventional vision of teachers which views teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.

    4. English teaching would be a very interesting profession thus, she kept doing her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program.

    5. Educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research their own practices to create improvements in their own practices.

    6. The data was obtained, 79% of respondents believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7. People who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily
    and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

    8. The use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased in more places in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention that has given specifically to this issue, and only few studies have been carried out in this archipelago country to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

  11. Name : Serly Novita Ayuningtias
    SNR: 1112150008
    Class: A

    1. This study was conducted to get data that has relationship with the effect of reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.
    2. Even though she had been guided a classroom action researches, she still did not have enough confidence to conduct it.
    3. Very different from the conventional vision of teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment through researching their own practice.
    4. Since she believed that English teaching would be an interesting profession, she continuously kept doing her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program.
    5. Educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research,practices and use the findings to create improvements in their own practices.
    6. The distribution of the data revealed that 79% is very effective to use to develop writing skills.
    7. It was concluded that people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.
    8. The researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased dramatically in more places in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention that has given specifically to this issue, and only few studies have been carried out in this archipelago country to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

  12. MIKHA NAULY
    1112150031

    1.This study was conducted to get data that has relationship of reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.

    2.She still did not have confidence to conduct a classroom action research altough she had been guided

    3.Recently, the teacher’s vision as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged by the growing acknowledgement through researching their own practice.

    4.Since she believed that English teaching would be a very interesting profession, she kept doing her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program.

    5.Educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research and use the findings of these researches to create improvements

    6.Based on survey, 79% respondents’ perception believe blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7.Based on the findings, people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up easily and not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

    8.Researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased dramatically in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention to this issue, and only few studies have been investigated the role of Indonesia in English classes.

  13. NAME : GLADYS YUSIVA DOANE
    SIN : 111-21-500-46
    CLASS : B

    Sir, this is my revised version.

    1.This study was conducted to get empirical true informational data about the effect of reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.

    2.Although she had been guided to carry out some classroom action researches, she still did not confidence to conduct a classroom action research.

    3.The vision of teachers which views teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.

    4.Since English teaching would be an interesting profession, she still worked hard to finish her English teaching undergraduate program.

    5.Educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research, improve, and use the findings of their own practices.

    6.From the survey, 79% of the respondents’ perception believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7.The fact is people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

    8.The use of mother tongue in Indonesian public schools has been very little attention to increase the use of mother tongue, and few studies have been carried out in this archipelago country to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

  14. Nama : Cianly
    NIM : 111210047
    BS – B
    1. This study was conducted to get empirical data that has relationship with the effect of reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.
    2. She still did not have enough confidence to conduct a classroom action research individually although she had been guided in some classroom action researches.
    3. The conventional vision of teachers which views teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.
    4. English teaching would be a very interesting profession. So, she kept doing her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program.
    5. Educational pundits and philosophers have proposed should research and create improvements in their own practices.
    6. 79% from the survey concerning the respondents’ perception believe that blog is very effective use to develop writing skills.
    7. Based on the findings, people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.
    8. In Indonesian public schools use of mother tongue is very little attention has given specifically to this issue and only studies investigating the role of Indonesia in English classes.

  15. Hardianti Aprilianing Tias
    11 121 500 49
    BS –B
    1. This study was conducted to get data of relationship reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.

    2. Even though she had been guided classroom action research, she did not have confident to do research individually.

    3. Completely different from the conventional vision of teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.

    4. She is doing her best to finish English teaching undergraduate program.

    5. Beginning of the last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research their own practices to create improvements in their own practices.

    6. 79%, of the respondents believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7. Based on the findings, people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

    8. Because researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention o this issue, and only few studies have been carried out in this archipelago country to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

  16. Name : Dewi Natalia Perangin-angin
    SIN : 1112150042
    Class : B
    1. This study was conducted an empirical true informational data that has relation between the effect of reading comic and the student’s achievements in vocabulary learning.

    2. She wasn’t confidence to conduct a classroom action research individually whereas she had guided to carry out it.

    3. Recently, the teachers’ vision as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of people’s knowledge are different by growing acknowledgement for the empowerment through researching their own practice.

    4. Since she believed that English teaching would be an interesting profession, she kept doing her best to finish her undergraduate program.

    5. Educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational profession should research and use their own practices to create improvements.

    6. 79% of data from the survey believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7. People who fail to have success in careers frequently give up and aren’t tenacious in sticking to their goals.

    8. The researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms Indonesia public school have been little attention and few studies have been carried out to investigate the role of English classes in Indonesia.

  17. Name : Tuti Haryati Sihite
    SIN : 1112150044
    BS (B)

    1.The study was conducted to get empirical data about the effect of reading comics to the student’s achievement in vocabulary learning.

    2.She stil not confident to conduct the classroom However she had been guided many classroom action reasearches before.

    3.Recently,teacher as receiver, consumer,and dispenser has been challenged by growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of the teacher through the researching their own practice.

    4.After she knows that English teacing would be very interesting profession which is accepted in all countries. So,She kept doing her best to finish the English Teaching undergraduate program.

    5.Education pundits and philosopher have proposed that educational professionals should research their own practice to create improvements in their own practices.

    6.The data releaved that 79% the respondens belive that blog is effective to develop their writing skills.

    7.It was proved that people who fail in their careers give up easily in sticking to their goals.

    8.In Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention to increase on the use of mother tongue and only few studies investigating the role of Indonesia in English classes.

    Thank you sir 🙂

  18. Name : Damayanty Hotmauli
    SIN : 1112150023

    Sir, here i enclose my revised version.

    1. This study was conducted to get informational data that has effect of students’ learning vocabulary in reading comics.

    2. She was still not confident to conduct a classroom research individually though she had been guided many times.

    3. The conventional vision of teachers views teachers as the receiver,consumer,and dispenser but for the last decade the empowerment of teachers is through researching their own practice.

    4. She kept doing her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program because she believed it would be interesting and be accepted around the world.

    5. From the beginning of the last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research and create improvements in their own practices.

    6. Based on the respondents’ perception in the blog’s effectiveness revealed that 79% of them believe that blog is very effective to use in developing writing skills.

    7. Based on the findings, people who fail in their careers are frequently give up easily and not in sticking to their goals.

    8. In Indonesian public schools, there has been a little attention of the increasing use of the mother tongue and only few studies to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes.

    Thank You, Sir 🙂

  19. Name : Mei Pangaribuan
    SIN : 1112150015
    Class : BS A

    Good night sir, I had done my avoiding Syntax Errors in Scientific Writing (Word Choice) assignment. Here I sent it.

    1. This study was conducted to get data about the effect of reading comic to students’ achievements in vocabulary learning.

    2. Although she had studied doing the some classroom action researches, she did not confident to do it.

    3. Teachers’ vision as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged recently by the growing need for
    teachers’empowerment through researching their own practice.

    4. Since English teaching would be a very interesting profession, she still studies hard to finish her English teaching undergraduate program.

    5. Educational pundits have proposed that educational professionals should be research, use and improve the finding in their own practices.

    6. The data obtained that 79% of respondent believe that blog is very effective to develop writing skills.

    7. It was concluded that people who fail in their careers give up easily in sticking to their goals.

    8. In Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms and investigating the role of Indonesia in English classes.

    Thank you, sir.

  20. NAME : MELVA MELISA TAMBUNAN
    S I N : 11. 121. 500. 16
    CLASS : FKIP BS – A (2011)

    1. The purpose of this study was to obtain the data about the effect of reading comics to students’ achievement in learning vocabulary.

    2. She’s still not confident, although she had been guided to do of classroom action research.

    3. Contrast from teachers’ conventional vision about teacher as the receiver, consumer and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged recently by the growing acknowledgement of the need for teachers’ empowerment through researching their own practice.

    4. She believes that teaching English is an interesting profession in the world, so she spirit to complete the English teaching undergraduate program.

    5. From the first, education experts suggested that professionals should examine their own educational practice using research findings.

    6. Majority, 79% of respondents believe that the blog is very effective for developing writing skills.

    7. In fact, people who fail because they often give up, not tenacious and not sticking to their goals.

    8. Several studies have been conducted to determine the role of Indonesia in English class, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention because of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased dramatically.

    Thank you, Sir.

  21. Naomi Anitasari
    1112150034 / BS-B

    Sir, here is my revised version.

    1. This study was conducted to get data that has relationship with the effect of reading comics on students’ achievement in vocabulary learning.

    2. She still does not confidence to conduct a classroom action research individually even though she has been guided many times to do it.

    3. Different from the conventional vision of teachers which views teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.

    4. Since English teaching would be an interesting profession, she kept doing her best to finish her study of The English teaching undergraduate program.

    5. Educational professionals should research in their own practices and use the findings to create improvements.

    6. The data revealed that 79% of the respondents’ believe that blog is effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7. In fact, people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

    8. In Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention to increase on the use of mother tongue and only few studies investigating the role of Indonesia in English classes while in foreign language classrooms have increased.

  22. NAME : MEGA INTAN SARI
    NIM : 1112150012
    CLASS : A

    1. This study was conducted to get true data that has relationship by reading comics to achievements of students in vocabulary learning.

    2. Although she had been guided to do of classroom action research, she is still did not confident to do it.

    3. The convensional vision teachers which views teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.

    4. She still worked hard to finish her English teaching undergraduate program which would be an interesting profession.
    5. In beginning of the last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research their own practices to create improvements in their own practices.

    6. The distribution of the data obtained from the survey concerning the respondents’ perception revealed that the majority of them i.e. 79%, believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7. The survey concerning the respondents’ perception revealed that 79% respondents believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    8. In Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention that researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased dramatically in the world and only few studies to investigate the role of Indonesia in English.

    Thanks so much, sir.

  23. Name: Annery Fienta
    SIN: 1112150024
    Class: A

    The revised version:

    1. This study was conducted to get data about the effect of reading comics to students’ achievement in vocabulary learning.

    2. Although she had studied doing some classroom action reaearches, she was still not confident to conduct it.

    3. Teachers’ vision about teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of people’s knowledge has been challanged recently by the growing need for teachers’ empowerment through researching their own practice.

    4. Since English teaching would be an interesting profession, she still worked hard to finish her English teaching undergraduate program.

    5. Educational pundits have proposed that educational professional should research, improve, and use the findings of their practices.

    6. The data revealed that 79% of respondents believe that blog is effective to develop writing skills.

    7. It was proved that people who fail in their careers give up easily in sticking to their goals.

    8. In Indonesia public schools, there has been very little attention to the increase of the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms and only few studies investigating the Indonesia’s role in English classes.

    Thanks, Sir.

    1. Name: Annery Fienta
      SIN: 1112150024
      Class: A

      The revised version:

      1. This study was conducted to get data about the effect of reading comics to students’ achievement in vocabulary learning.

      2. Although she had studied doing some classroom action researches, she was still not confident to conduct it.

      3. Teachers’ vision about teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of people’s knowledge has been challanged recently by the growing need for teachers’ empowerment through researching their own practice.

      4. Since English teaching would be an interesting profession, she still worked hard to finish her English teaching undergraduate program.

      5. Educational pundits have proposed that educational professional should research, improve, and use the findings of their practices.

      6. The data revealed that 79% of respondents believe that blog is effective to develop writing skills.

      7. It was proved that people who fail in their careers give up easily in sticking to their goals.

      8. In Indonesia, there has been very little attention to the increase of the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms and only few studies investigating the Indonesia’s role in English classes.

  24. YULIA LESTARI TARIHORAN
    1112150041
    BS-B

    The Revision of those Ineffective Sentences :

    1. The goal of this study is r to get empirical true data that has relationship with the effect of reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.

    2. She did not have confidence to do a research individually even though she has learned research methodology in the classroom.

    3. Different from the conventional vision of teachers which views teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.

    4. She kept doing her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program.

    5. Educational professionals should research their own practices and use it to create improvement.

    6. 79% of the respondents’ perception believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

    7. People who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

    8. Because of the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been little attention to this issue, and few studies have been carried out to investigate the role of Indonesia in English classes

    1. Hi Yulia.
      There’s no single absolutely correct version for every sentence. However, you and other students will probably learn something if you consider the following version of mine.
      Happy learning!

      1. This study was conducted in order to get empirical true informational data that has relationship with [concerning] the effect of reading comics to the achievements of students in vocabulary learning.

      This study was conducted to get empirical data concerning the effect of reading comics to students’ achievements in vocabulary learning.

      2. Even though she had been guided a numerous number of times to carry out some classroom action researches, she still did not have enough confidence to conduct a classroom action research [one] individually.

      Even though she had been guided numerous times to carry out some classroom action researches, she still did not have enough confidence to conduct one individually.
      or: …… she was still diffident to conduct one individually

      3. Very completely different from the [The] conventional vision of teachers which views [sees] teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.

      The conventional vision which sees teachers as the receiver, consumer, and dispenser of other people’s knowledge has been challenged over the last decade by the growing acknowledgement of the need for the empowerment of teachers through researching their own practice.

      4. Since she believed that English teaching would be a very interesting profession which is accepted in all countries in [all over] the world, she continuously kept doing her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program.

      Since she believed that English teaching would be a very interesting profession all over the world, she kept doing her best to finish the English teaching undergraduate program.

      5. Beginning [Starting from] from the early beginning of the last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research their own practices and use the findings of these researches of theirs to create improvements in their own practices.

      Starting from from the beginning of the last century, educational pundits and philosophers have proposed that educational professionals should research their own practices and use the findings to create improvements in their own practices.

      6. The distribution of the data obtained from the survey concerning the respondents’ perception in the blog’s effectiveness to develop writing skills revealed that the majority of them [the respondents] i.e. 79%, believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

      The distribution of the data revealed that the majority of the respondents, i.e. 79%, believe that blog is very effective to use to develop writing skills.

      7. Based on the findings, it was concluded that, as a matter of fact, people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

      Based on the findings, it was concluded that, people who fail to have success in their careers frequently give up too easily and are not tenacious in sticking to their goals.

      8. In spite of the fact that [Although] researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased dramatically in more and more places in the world, in Indonesian public schools, there has been very little attention that has been given specifically to this issue, and only few studies have been carried out in this archipelago country to investigate the role of Indonesian in English classes.

      Although researches on the use of mother tongue in foreign language classrooms have increased dramatically in more and more places in the world, in Indonesian setting very little attention has been given to this issue, and only few studies have been carried out to investigate the role of Indonesian in English classes.

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